题目要求结合冲突事件写一篇短文,向学校英文报“Happy Teens”专栏投稿。内容需要包括:
1. 简要描述事情的经过;
2. 分析冲突发生的原因;
3. 谈谈避免冲突的做法。
满分范文是这样写的(可以直接套用的结构):
Conflict with others are common in everyday life. During the basketball game yesterday afternoon, Su Hua and Li Jiang bumped into each other, trying to catch the ball. Then they started shouting and yelling, and it turned into a horrible quarrel. To be honest, it was Su's fault but Li was also to blame — they were not calm enough and both said some really mean things. They cared too much about winning and losing. As a matter of fact, blocking, pushing and bumping are just part of a tough game. To avoid such conflict, we should be kind to one another, which is essential to enjoying a harmonious life. It is also a virtue to forgive and forget.
写的时候记住这几个要点(评分标准里的高分关键):
覆盖所有要点:把碰撞、吵架、原因、解决办法都写上。
用点高级词汇和结构:比如把“quarrel”升级成“horrible quarrel”,用“To be honest”开头显得客观,用“which is essential to…”这种非限定性定语从句。但别为了复杂硬堆长句,弄得谁都看不懂。
简洁明了:能用一个短语说清楚就别用从句。比如“Li Jiang, Su Hua's classmate, is also to blame”就比“Li Jiang, who is Su Hua's classmate, is also to blame”更利索。